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September 03, 2010

We All Fall Down by AddiCakes
Reviewed By Les16
*This story is no longer available*

Rating: M
Genre:  Hurt/Romance/Comfort
Characters: Edward/Bella  

Summary: Edward, Bella, & Alice swore they would be best friends forever. When one of them falls, will she take the other two down with her? "Ashes, ashes, we all fall down." AH

When you click on the button to under AddiCake’s profile to add this story, or click on a link from another site to this amazing piece of work, be prepared. She tells you straight out, up front, that this is a story that deals with suicide and mental illness and it’s not for the faint of heart. If you can get past that, then strap in for a bumpy, but amazing story of friendship, love, and healing.

The prologue sets the stage, with haunting imagery as it shows Edward, Bella, and Alice as children, happily playing a game we all have played at one time or other. They sing:

Ring around the rosie,
A pocket full of posies,
Ashes, Ashes,
We all fall down!

How many times have we all sung those exact same words, never really paying attention to the meaning? In Addi’s story, obviously, one of them falls, leaving the other two to try to move on without them. They are innocent children, oblivious to the pain and heartbreak they will encounter as adults. But innocence never lasts and children must grow up.

There is glorious use of imagery in this story, meant to evoke strong emotions. With sentences like: On occasion red and brown would clash—for they were both such passionate people, even then—and the black-haired girl would step between them to forge a bridge of peace. The story begins with death then moves backward showing what lead up to the fateful moment. It’s painful to read, for you can see the signs clear as day, but that is often the case with suicide. That is also what our beloved Edward and Bella must navigate through as well.

In the midst of all this, we have Edward…adorable somewhat dorky Edward who is madly in love with his best friend Bella. He has no idea when his feelings changed for Bella, but knows unequivocally they have. He is terrified of admitting his feelings for fear of ruining their lifelong friendship, but knows the time has come when he must admit what he feels because going on much longer the way he has been isn’t an option.

AddiCake’s Bella is no shrinking violet either. She’s snarky and feisty and she happily abuses Edward when she feels the need to do so. The three friends live together in a rundown apartment that they have turned into a home…thanks in great part to Bella’s obsessive need to clean. Edward enjoys the fruits of living with two women especially the clean bathroom.

The glimpses we see of Alice’s unraveling are heartbreaking. Her despair, her anxiousness about failing her classes, the despondent way she acts during a blind date Bella has set up for her…all are clues to the impending spiral we know is coming. We know there is a break up with Jasper, but there is way more there, bubbling just beneath the surface. You want to reach through the computer screen and wrap her in a warm hug and then run to Bella and Edward and warn them.

You also want to shake Edward and Bella because the feelings they have for one another are so blatantly obvious to all around them except to them. It will be interesting to see how those feelings manifest themselves as they deal with the loss of their best friend, the mediator and buffer between them.

We All Fall Down is only a few chapters in but is already set up to be a wonderful story of healing and love and learning to trust that being friends can be a wonderful base on which to build a relationship. The clues are there that Bella and Edward learn that lesson, but there is no doubt it will be a painful one as well. Give this story a try, it’s well worth a few tears to take this journey with them.


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