WIP of the Week: 2/7-2/13

February 07, 2011

Pigtails by Tenley Einde
Review by Maxandmo
*This Story is No Longer Available* 

Rating: M
Genre: Romance/Drama
Characters: Edward/Bella

Summary: I just don't want this to be over. I know it should be. Hell, I just gave you a list of reasons why I should walk away." Will he give in to her teasing ways, or will he take the advice of a friend, "Just one word, E. Jailbait."? AH/OOC/BxE

So, when I read the summary of this fic I wasn't sure how I would feel about it. It only took the first chapter to realize that Bella is portrayed as a confident, beautiful, smart, and horny teenager. Her body rocks and she knows it. Tease is the perfect word to describe her virginal self. The instant attraction between Edward and Bella is so well written that you can't help but want them to hook up.

Phil, Bella's step-father, is the pitching coach of the Arizona League Mariners, an Arizona baseball team where Edward works in the Sports Medicine Department. A case of mistaken identity leads Bella to believe that the beautiful stranger is an intern, age 19. She is so drawn to him and makes it her mission to be with him.

Edward believes she's in college instead of high school due to the fact she's studying in the summer. He isn't really concerned with her age, once he realizes she is Phil's step-daughter. In fact, their age gap doesn't bother him in the least when he does find out (he is from Amsterdam where this must not be frowned upon). Though it sounds pervy in a bad way, the writers make it so that it's an afterthought. Bella is mature, and Edward is clearly enamored by her.

The story is told from Bella's point of view, which clearly enhances the fact that she knows what she wants and what she's doing. Edward's point of view is seen in the prologue and will be seen in the epilogue.

They find out each other's ages and instead of being deterred, Bella is even more into this man.

My finger finds it way back on the program as I read his bio. "Anthonij Cullen-Physical Therapy. May 2008 graduate from the University of Arizona with a Bachelors of Science in Kinesiology. Age 28."

Edward ends up tutoring Bella in German with her parent's blessing. Though he takes it seriously, it's a perfect way for them to spend time together. His German tongue is amazing ;)

Bring your homework with you. Wear a skirt. You'll get extra credit if there's nothing under it...E

Ich habe etwas, das wird Schweigen das hübschen kleinen Mund von Ihnen.

Phil and Renee are in true inappropriate form in this story, and it's amusing to see Bella and her best friend Angela grossed out by their antics.

This story is twelve chapters in and leaves the readers wanting more. It's a perfect time to start reading it since things are really starting to heat up. The story flows easily and is a very quick read. I look forward to reading the rest of it!


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