New Fic of the Week: 2/13/12

February 16, 2012

The Veil by Belladonnacullen
Review by Obsmama and FictionFreak95

Rating: M
Genre: Romance/Hurt/Comfort
Characters: Edward & Bella

Summary: You always have the choice between life and death... until you don't. There is poetry at the beginning and end of our journey, but it's what you make of the interim that counts. BxE, rated M, canon parings.

So few words, so many emotions, this woman. Example numero uno...

 ~ excerpt from chapter 1 ~ 

Nighttime, in Edward's arms, his breath in my hair. "You are my life now," he whispers. 

I wrap my limbs tighter. I don't want space between us. I need his hands to make me come alive. I need him to light these dark times I have away. 

"I'll love you forever," he breathes as he rolls a nipple between rough finger pads. 

There is no forever. Not for me. 

"No forever tonight," I insist. 

He sighs. 

"Just now," I request climbing astride. There's no lingerie tonight. I want skin on skin, slipping against satin sheets. Men in this position don't often argue. Edward is no different. His hands grip my hips, pressing our bodies together where it counts. Forward, up, down, we both groan as he fits inside. 

 I slide; he pumps. I press thighs, he grabs my ass. 

"Come here," he demands. 

I fall forward and his lips catch mine. He sets the pace. His biceps flex as he rocks me forward. Faster, harder… I sweat, I tingle. He tugs my hair; I arch my back. 

His lips close over my breast. 

Eternity is just a kiss away. 

JO: Mama, goosebumps.

MAMA: Right?

JO: I love that she’s doing a vamp fic.

MAMA: This isn’t vamp.

JO: Um. Yes it is.

MAMA: What makes you think that?

JO:W ell, how about we just visit chapter 2, then, shall we?

 "Do you pray?" 

"Not in some time," Edward answers. I seek solace against his chest. Fresh air wafts through the window and I snuggle in. His chin rests atop my head. "My father did, though. He was a man of great faith… Do you?" 

 "I prayed today, with a patient." Edward's arms clutch tighter. I wriggle against him, reveling in the feel of his bare skin against mine. His long legs reach past my feet and his pale skin glimmers against brown satin. 

His mouth slides to my ear. "I would pray for you." 

"But you already have me." 

Edward chuckles. "Perhaps, but not in the way I'd prefer. Let me rephrase. I would pray with you – if you needed it." 

"I wouldn't know where to start." 

His hands slip through my arms until he's hugging my breasts. 

 "Pater noster, qui es in caelis," he whispers in my ear. My body trembles. 

"What's that?" 

"The way to start - The Lord's Prayer." 

"Do you know more?" 

His lips slip to my neck. "Sanctificetur nomen tuum," he hums, murmuring his way to my collarbone. 

I sigh. Thighs press together. 

"Adveniat regnum tuum." 

I roll to my side; a knee parts my legs. Hands clasp breasts; fingers find nipples. His mouth is occupied with my earlobe and the only sound is the scuttle of dry leaves against the downspouts. 

"Thy will be done?" I prompt, hoping for more. 

His breath baths my shoulder. 

"Sicut in caelo et in terra." The words ripple and roll over my skin. Edward presses my body against his and holds my top leg folded against my chest. He plunges and rocks, filling me completely. I'm lost in the lull of his voice and the rhythm of his cock. 

"Panem nostrum quotidianum da nobis hodie, 
et dimitte nobis debita nostra sicut et nos dimittimus debitoribus nostris. 
Et ne nos inducas in tentationem, 
sed libera nos a malo. 

MAMA: Ok, maybe it's vamp.

JO: It’s totally vamp. OK, so tell me why you love this fic so much.

MAMA: I love it because even with dealing with something as hard as death Belladonnacullen breathes such life in to this story. I don’t feel like its a story about dying, I feel like its a story about living. The erotic nature of these characters has me in a tailspin, as well. What drew you in Jo?

JO: What draws me into any BDC fic? There is just something about the way she writes a story that makes it feel like poetry. And the mystery... she’s always pulling me in by not telling me a whole hell of a lot at first. Like Bella’s scars... ya know? And not to mention the ridiculous sexiness of these two is just... NNNNF. And the little tid bit hints of the secrecy behind him.

~ from chapter 3 ~ 

"But if I were you, I'd be talking about my hot new boyfriend instead of all the people dropping dead around me." 

"His hands weren't hot," Vivienne states. 

MAMA: Did you see how playful she made them in that last update? There is just such a great balance. She never lets you get caught up in the sadness that is Bella’s job. I can’t wait to see where shes taking this. Do you think we could get her to spill some secrets?

 ~ from Chapter 4 ~ 

I jumped across the couch in Edward's direction, spinning as I went. 

"Dude, have some fun!" 

"I do have fun." 

"Listening to jazz? Please." I resumed shouting along with Joe Elliot. 

Pour some sugar on me 
Ooh, in the name of love 

In the space of a breath Edward was standing in front of me on the couch, his hands planted against the wall on either side of my head. I stopped shouting, and moving and breathing, even as my body flashed to attention and came alive. 

"Don't tell me how I feel. I do have fun," he rumbled. 

JO: I KNOW! I could totally see Bella in my head jumping around like a maniac and Edward being all bored to death. So classic *coughs* vampire *coughs* … LOL but regarding her secrets... I’m gonna have to say, highly doubtful mama... unfortunately... you know how she likes to make us squirm.

MAMA: FINE. I guess I will just have to keep reading and I can’t wait to see if this is really a vamp and where she's taking us. I love it each and every chapter is more beautiful then the one before it. Thanks for reading with me Jo.

JO: You are so welcome mama... and I completely agree with you on this... with every chapter I open, it’s more and more sensual, more and more interesting and there are definitely more and more secrets to be revealed... and for the record, I am also in complete agreement with you about this fic being more about life... and how Bella is so torn because she truly loves this man, wants to spend eternity with him (because he’s a vamp) but really wants to keep her humanity... especially as we watch her watching patients hold on to hope, even as they die all around her.

~ from chapter 4 ~ 

I open the door and I'm bathed in candlelight. I smell roasting meat in the kitchen. 

I get it. 

"Hard day at the office?" he asks, sending shivers down my spine. 

This is my life. 

He greets with a kiss, and large, gentle hands slip around my waist. 

It is what it is. 

"I love you," I murmur. The words fall from my lips like they've been waiting my whole life to be spoken. 

 I still want to keep it. 

We can’t say enough about how beautifully told this story is. I have never seen the topics of love and death so well intermingled and it leaves you thinking when the chapter is over. The sensuality is breathtaking and relationships are so well developed. We would love for you to join in reading and discussing this story with us.


  1. Debbie said...:

    Such wonderful comments from such great authors as yourselves makes me want to break my steadfast rule of no more new stories until I finish what I'm reading! You've left me salivating for this story. And those little snippets you included--gah! I'm dyin' here! Thanks for yet another wonderful rec. How will I ever find enough time to read all of the amazing stories out there??!

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